My sister, is not afraid of monsters my, sister
does not wake up,and yell , and scream no monsters creep ,my sister and no monsters go under her bed, no monsters pench my sister's cheeks my sister is not afraid of monsters,
And no monsters sit on my sisters head my and they sound like rusty chainsaws and some have hooves and some and shave fins and some have paws and claws my sister is not afraid of monsters so mum puts her in bed with her cause those scary hairy monsters are terrified of me.
Hi Abdullah
ReplyDeleteThis is a super description about your sister. I like the photo you chose to show you are kind, caring and protective towards your sister. You Abdullah are her big brave brother.
You have used some super words in your writing. The rhyming words "paws and claws" really make the monsters sound a bit scary.
Keep up the great online learning Abdullah.
Mrs Law
Hello Abdullah my name is Fariha from Te Waka Ako. Wow that monster sounds really really scary 👾. But it is a good thing you there to protect your sister. If the monster is not under her bed, is it under yours? I love that you used different words in your blog. Are you afraid of monsters? This was a very interesting blog. I never read a blog about a sibling or a monster before. Great job!! Here is my blog please comment https://wpsfarihah.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteHi Abdullah, my name is Marcus from Waikowhai Primary School. I liked your story, it is very creative. It reminds me of my brothers. Maybe next time you could do an intro. Overall it is really good and I liked it a lot. If you would like, you can check out my blog https://wpsmarcusw.blogspot.com/
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Hi my name is Yousuf from Te Waka Ako. I really liked how you Put some adjectives in your writing. Maybe next time you could read your post again and fix up your mistakes. This remembers me when I had to write about a eyed tree. If you want to check my blog here it is http://wpsyousufs.blogspot.com/2018/01/welcome.html#comment-form
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